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Hi, I write fanfiction and I will do requests eventually, if anyone actually asks.


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It’s been days since I’ve told them everything and they’ve moved me down into a dark room, strapped into a chair with a red pattern on the floor.

I should of been honest. I shouldn’t of lied. But I need to get help.

For her.

“Rise and shine, princess.” Dean’s deep voice echoes in the darkness beyond this room.

“Please don’t call me that.”

“Call you what? Princess? Would you prefer bitch who lied to us?”

I sigh, hanging my head.

Light enters the room through the doors sliding open as Dean enters, walking behind me and beginning to unchain my arms from the chair.


“Don’t say anything. You said something about getting into Avalon right?”

“Yes, why? Do you wish to return to your duties?”

“My duties? Hell no. I’m gonna cut all ties to Oberon and you’re gonna help me.”

He couldn’t possibly mean…

“Yeah princess, that thing. See I found it in a big ol’ book about Oz that I got from a friend-”

“Charlie.” He grabs my wrists, clenching them tightly, his gaze searing into me.

“Don’t you ever say her name, ok?”

I nod and watch as he unchains my legs, still keeping one of my wrists within his grasp.

“Dean, please let go. Please. You’re hurting me.”

He chuckled darkly, pulling me into a standing position before dragging me along behind him. “Do I care?”
The ride had ended and it was hell.

Aside from the overall fear of death, the awkwardness was eating me alive.

The cute guy next to me, who is possibly a stoner, is now covered in the contents of my stomach.

“I am really sorry about this. I’m not usually like this. Generally because I don’t go on roller coasters, or lifts or bridges…”

The guy starts walking off.

“Wait. I didn’t get your name.” I jog to catch up to him as he swiftly meanders through the crowd.

“It doesn’t matter.”

“What do you mean it doesn’t matter? I need to know your name so I can… apologise for…” I point at his hoodie, “…that…”

He sighs and walks out of the entrance to the park, stopping just outside and taking what looks like a cigarette from his pocket.

“Is that a joint? Or is that a cigarette? Or is that, you know…”

He turns to me, putting the cigarette to his lips and lighting it, inhaling a long drawl before exhaling a cloud of smoke, “No, it’s just a cigarette. Tobacco. Why do you care anyway?”

“Well, judging by the bluish tint around your lips despite your darker skin tone, you;re addicted to Morphine. Also, you’ve probably been snorting it because the tint is around your nose most prominently. So, you’ll be coming with me, okay?”

“Wait, what?”

“I’m supposed to be off hours but drug abuse has increased lately. NYPD, you’re under arrest. You have the right to remain silent, anything you say can and will be held against you. Let’s go.”
Holy shit.

Holy shit.

Why am I here?

Oh yeah, (Y/F/N) is gonna pay off all my rent if I can do this.

Which I can…


I can’t ride a rollercoaster.


“The ride is about to start, please keep your hands and feet in the moving vehicle at all times.”


The guy sat next to me sighs, burrowing himself deeper into his hoodie.

My hands tightly grip the bar in front, becoming paler by the second.

I can’t breathe it’s too hot.

Oh God.

Goosebumps litter my skin

“Hi, excuse me.”

The guy next to me turns his head left, facing me. Holy shit, he’s gorgeous.


“The ride will now start in 10… 9 … 8 …”

Oh he’s staring. What do I do? What do I say? Think, Y/N, think.

“7… 6… 5… 4…”

He sighs, slouching in his seat. I look at him again, he has off coloured skin, kind of blue actually, almost as if…

“Do you take drugs?”

“3… 2″

He turns towards me, “Wha-”

The ride takes off as he’s mid sentence.

Overall, this is a very interesting piece. The lack of rhyme does not hinder the natural flow but improves it. The structural use of paragraphs was a nice touch. The poem is very beautiful with lots of powerful imagery. It's very emotive but the it seems like imagery is the backbone of the poem rather than emotive language, which is great but it might not give the impact you wish to be conveyed with this wonderful piece of imagery. Nice use of punctuation. Great work, I will definitely read more of your work in the future because this is amazing.

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sindysugar Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2016
Thank you for the favs! :iconletmehugyouplz:
KittenQueen24 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the favs!! :huggle:
abvore Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the faves~
Thank you so, so, SO much for all of the faves and the watch! I love your username haha.
Words-Of-Fate Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2016  Student Writer
Thank you so much for the watch and for the fav on Behind the Act (Tamaki Suoh x Tsundere!Reader)! :heart:
RandmWriter Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2016  Student Writer
xXSilveretteRoseXx Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome to the Garden, my rosebud~! Rose 

Thank you so very much for the watch~! 
I really appreciate it!

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Is there a particular reason you like my writing? 
I'd love to know so I can continue to write things you enjoy!
ViperPeggy Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the fave! I appreciate it. <3
Canadian-girl17 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2016  Student Writer
Thank you for the favorite ^-^
xXElectricPhoenixXx Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2016
Thanks for the watch!
I hope I can continue posting things you like :D
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